Clarence Boddicker

I don't really get the whole part with the body washing up on the shore. The hat floats by, and then the body, but he...doesn't realize what it is. If ...

I really like the way you wrote this, but it's a little too vague, especially toward the end. There are also a few parts that detract from the overall feel ...

The first sentence seems to be written backwards to me, not to mention unnecessary. If you're gonna keep it, I'd rephrase it, or at least throw a comma after "trees" ...

Killing characters should be purely a matter of moving the plot (since these are apparently main characters), so there really shouldn't be a whole lot of deciding to do. Obviously, ...

Fairytale is, I think, an antiquated term. What used to be called a fairytale is now called fantasy, for whatever reason, so when I think "fairytale," I think of those ...